The practice question
Some people think cities should spend more on public transport than on new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
This original practice question asks for a position and reasons that support it. The example below focuses on developing one reason, rather than assessing a whole essay.
01 / Original draft
Public transport can solve many problems in cities. Governments should spend more money on buses and trains because this is good for people.02 / A focused revision
More frequent buses can make commuting more reliable. When passengers can reach work without long waits, public transport becomes a practical alternative to driving.What needs attention?
“Many problems” and “good for people” do not identify the benefit or explain how it happens. The reader has to supply the reasoning. The opinion itself is understandable; the supporting explanation needs to be more specific.
Why this change helps
The revision chooses one benefit—reliable commuting—and connects it to a mechanism: more frequent services reduce waiting. It then explains why that matters to the argument about transport spending. This is one possible development of the idea, not a fact that was already present in the draft.
A learner should check whether this is the point they intended to make. A revision that changes the argument without explaining the change is less useful for learning.
Your next practice step
Write two sentences supporting a different reason for investing in public transport. Name a specific benefit in the first sentence. In the second, explain what causes that benefit. Underline the words that make the connection clear.
What this example does—and does not—show
It illustrates the relationship between a source sentence, feedback, a revision and a practice action. It does not show the full product interface, guarantee a band score or establish how a complete report will assess a particular essay.